Once there was a Pug who liked daffodils and movies.
One day he got sucked into a movie. He was driving a car on a huge bridge that fell off a cliff into a pink river of blood. The car exploded in the air then the Pug jumped quickly out of the car. BOOM!!!. “Aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh” shouted the Pug.
A plane came out of nowhere. Vroom!!!
“Got ya” said the French Bulldog pilot as he scooped Pug from the air.
“What's your name?” Asked the French Bulldog.
“Josh” said the Pug. Then they flew to safety as ash from the crash was sprinkled in the air.
Nice writing Jye! Pugs are crazy! And have familiar names... I especially like the way you have laid out the speaking parts of your story properly with a new line for each new person speaking. Very professional.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading the dialogue between the French Bulldog and the Pug! The onomatopoeia (sound words) really add to the story, too - nice work.
ReplyDeleteJye your writing is getting better and better good work babe keep it up
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I agree with the comment from Louise! You have used excellent words to create a picture inside my head - well done!
ReplyDeletei like your story i like the part where the pug gets sucked into the movie by Micah :p
ReplyDeleteThank you giys
ReplyDeleteWow what a adventure.
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