The huge bridge in my garden is extremely old and is covered in ivy and roses.There are also pink daffodils they are sprinkled with rain when it rains. But my house is a different story. My room has a lego ship it is a big one. One day i heard the sound of warplanes then a big explosion then another one and another one until one came on me boom.The house blew up i was homeless. i ran across the rickety old bridge but the bridge suddenly fell under my weight. because of the booming. i swam down the river.
Great first attempt at the 100 Word Challenge. Nice use of language Kasper. In particular I like the descriptions of the rickety old bridge. Remember to use a capital letter for I.
Well done on your entry this week Kasper. You have used some great descriptions in your story. I'd like to read more about this adventure, hopefully everything worked out ok in the end. Keep up the great writing. Ms Brennock Team 100 w/c Dublin Ireland
Great first attempt at the 100 Word Challenge.
ReplyDeleteNice use of language Kasper. In particular I like the descriptions of the rickety old bridge.
Remember to use a capital letter for I.
I agree with Mrs G Kasper. Great use of vocabulary to keep your reader excited and interested. You paint a good picture with your words.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mrs G Kasper. Great use of vocabulary to keep your reader excited and interested. You paint a good picture with your words.
ReplyDeleteNice work, Kasper! I really like your interesting word choices, especially the onomatopoeia and adjectives.
ReplyDeleteWell done on your entry this week Kasper. You have used some great descriptions in your story. I'd like to read more about this adventure, hopefully everything worked out ok in the end.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great writing.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin
Ireland
There is so much going on in your story Kasper! It makes it really interesting for me to read :)
ReplyDelete:) Nice Kasper - I wonder what you will write next? Looking forward to seeing more.
ReplyDeletegreat story
ReplyDeleteWhat a contrast you have created between the house and the garden. I like the idea of a Lego ship. I wonder what would happen net in your story?
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