I was at the park, with my two friends Havana and Sofia but just then, we heard something. “ Guys, do you hear that,?” Said Havana. looked at Havana.
“ Uh, there is a… Giant slime monster behind you! We ran away but the monster started to.catch up.Uuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhh!” Sofia shouted! The slime dripped through the grass as the monster still chasing us. But then, I spotted a huge bucket of water. “Quick Havana, get that big bucket of water with Sofia and I will get him to chase me”. Then they friends went and came back with a bucket of water and poured it on the monster. “We did it!” We shouted.
Well done to create a short story that goes from a walk in the park, to being chased by a slime monster, to a successful conclusion in a short amount of words. Mostly you have good control of punctuation, but this could do with another read through for some minor errors.
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