Once I was going on a school trip to the melbourne aquarium to see whale sharks. But they died.
“When the sharks died they this weird green slime inside them”said the nurse “what is it!”said a five year old “that is what we don't know” said the nurse. “What types of sharks did you have we had tiger, whale sharks, great white sharks and a megalodon “LIES!!!” said a 10 year old called Billy he is very annoying “Megalodons di Billy did not have time to finish, slime dripped through the ceiling on to Billy's head and he screamed and died.
Well done Charlie. I am starting to see you gaining more control of your ideas. This is a good and original idea.
ReplyDeleteNext time remember the new speaker, new line rule for speech. As always, a final read through and check for small errors would be good too.