Saturday, May 6, 2017

The Big Walk by Jacob

It was November  1964 and me and my family were going on a good old fashioned walk .We walked up a steep hill " Mummy are we home yet?  " I said as we began the walk . Finally we got home I was so thirsty I ran to the kitchen sink  I grabbed a cup I  turned on the tap and the slime dripped  through ... "What's going on? " I took the tap off and found a little, green alien spitting slime into the tap.  "Daddy do you know how this alien got here? " yes, I put it there  " laughed dad Turning into an big, green alien  
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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousMay 6, 2017 at 3:48 PM

    I had to smile when I saw you had changed your date to 1964 for your 'good, old fashioned' teacher! I really like this story Jacob and it reflects the time you took to go through it carefully and edit. It is a funny story with an unexpected ending and you have used language well. You are gaining more control of punctuation each week. Well done.

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