Wednesday, November 1, 2017

100WC Emily B & Zoe M

Ducking out of the way just in time, SHE FELT RELIEVED IT had MISSED HER, BUT THE FEELING DIDN'T LAST LONG, she started to slash at its arms with her dagger and killed the last zombie. Suddenly she felt searing pain like a flame burning her skin. As cold as ice she started swimming in the pool of blood she had once called home. She stopped at the destroyed buildings that had one been tall, Big and white. Barely feeling alive she celebrated that THis day soon be over. thinking, Finally it would be over soon, soon it would be tomorrow.
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1 comment:

  1. MollyNovember 5, 2017 at 8:29 AM

    Hi girls, love the zombie theme. I would like to suggest some ways to make this even better! Maybe avoid capitalising words, good writing doesn't need to be emphasised that way. Careful of randomly capitalising certain workings as well, readers take writing more seriously when it demonstrates correct grammar and style. Also- just proof read as you said one been tall when I assume you meant once.
    Great work, keep it up.

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