Saturday, May 6, 2017

The Slime Attack by Zara


One day a girl called Lilly (aka the devil child) had an idea to haunt the upstairs neighbor so she decide to make a monster blob called …….. HENRY (aka a angle)she sent him up stairs and then the slimed dripped through the roof and then the slime Henry said in. “Godly voice I do not like your evil ways” and sent her to the underworld you would think a god couldn't do that but they can anyways in the underworld Lilly said “GRR I WILL GET YOU HENRY” she was also never seen again also Henry is Zeus the God of everything
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1 comment:

  1. Louise GMay 6, 2017 at 4:17 PM

    Hi Zara. Good idea here and I like the way you are using brackets appropriately, but I think this needs a reread. I think if you go through this carefully then you will see that there is some work to be done on punctuating your sentences and controlling your ideas more carefully.

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