One day at school I was in my classroom waiting for the roll to be called, Then I noticed a Owl falling to the ground. So I rushed outside and caught it just in time. The poor owl looked at me, then suddenly slime was dripping down to the ground I ran with the owl in my hands but it was too late, the slime cornered me at the school gates. I tried desperately to open them’ but the wouldn't open. Without a choes I threw the owl over the gate. The slime jumped then...
To be continued da da da daaa
Now that is one way to get around the 100 word limit. It is OK to have a story that will continue, like a chapter in a book, but stopping mid sentence is too much of a cliffhanger I think.
ReplyDeleteAs usual, I can see you making good language choices. I like the phrase, 'the slime cornered me at the school gates' and use of the word 'desperately'. I think a final read aloud next time will help you spot little errors that could be fixed before publishing.
Well done on your story this week. You've used some nice vocabulary (desperately, cornered). I agree with the comment above that you nneed to read over your story to check for spelling mistakes.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have used the prompt.
Keep up the good work.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin