Friday, June 8, 2018

The Huge Daffodil by Sam

One day as I walked over my beautiful bridge I fell off and landed on a huge daffodil. As I picked myself of the ground I realised that there was a pink massive door. I opened the massive door and to my surprise inside there was a golden crown covered in diamonds. I put the crown on and realised that the daffodil I was standing in had made a shelter from the rain that was sprinkled down. I walked out of the daffodil. As I walked home I patted my cat it licked my hand and started purring loudly.
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3 comments:

  1. Mr McDJune 9, 2018 at 4:36 PM

    Cool story Sam. It is full of fantasy which is a favourite genre of mine so that might make me a little biased but job well done!

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  2. AnonymousJune 9, 2018 at 6:47 PM

    I like the descriptive language in your short story! My favourite sentence is: " I opened the massive door and to my surprise inside there was a golden crown covered in diamonds." It reads just like a published book.

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  3. Toby StokesJune 10, 2018 at 2:26 PM

    Hi Sam, I really liked the phrase, "as I picked myself up". It reminded me of something my mum would say to me :)

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